[Digimon Adventure] METAL EMPIRE

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I posted this on FanFiction.net, but I also narrated it on my YouTube channel. Here are both if you're interested in checking them out:

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13064512/1/Digimon-Adventure-METAL-EMPIRE

Chapter 01: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=o9yXpYBDbPc

Chapter 02: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5s-3qL2ll2E

If you notice any differences between my narrations and the written versions, it's because ongoing corrections and editions after the videos were posted on YouTube. In the future, I'll be posting the written portions ahead of time and then do a narrated version sometime after it's been edited by myself and any readers who happen upon errors and such. Enjoy and let me know if you have any questions or comments!
 
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I've read the first two chapters and, so far, this is really good.

I'll leave a more detailed review on FFN once I've read the rest.
 

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I've read the first two chapters and, so far, this is really good.

I'll leave a more detailed review on FFN once I've read the rest.
Great! I look forward to it. So far the reviews haven't been that detailed, and I'm constantly wondering about hindsight.
 

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Well I've noticed two: instead of 'should' add -er: shoulder ; and if I'm not mistaken wasn't it wash instead of washe

It was a great chapter just wondering any plot progression with what happened to other Chosen next time.
 

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Well I've noticed two: instead of 'should' add -er: shoulder ; and if I'm not mistaken wasn't it wash instead of washe

It was a great chapter just wondering any plot progression with what happened to other Chosen next time.
Fixed those; more progression coming with Yamato's group in the next chapter.
 

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Is it going to continue soon?
Not soon, I've been getting to it as I can.

There's a few new chapters up so far.

Chapter 6 - https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13064512/6/Digimon-Adventure-METAL-EMPIRE

Chapter 7 - https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13064512/7/Digimon-Adventure-METAL-EMPIRE

Chapter 8 - https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13064512/8/Digimon-Adventure-METAL-EMPIRE

I've also uploaded an audio narration of Chapter 03 and will be uploading Chapter 04 sometime in the nearby future.

Chapter 04 (Narrated) - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VmWVxoJZBiY
 

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I should also add, I haven't had a lot of time to edit Chapters 5 through 8 and any input and/or criticism is welcome. I'm trying to touch up everything as best I can.
 
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